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Color Girl-First Color by Oxdarock Color Girl-First Color by Oxdarock

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Behold! After several months of writing, re-writing, drawing, and head-banging, I've finally decided to post the first part of my story! Many of you may notice that it's a rewrite of the first version that I posted months ago. Only difference? It's way more planned out and (in my opinion) a lot more fun.

Well, I hope you enjoyed the first chapter of this (somewhat perverted) tale. If you could, leave a comment and tell me what you think.

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:iconjahnah:
really, REALLY want to read the next section to this, since it looks pretty good.
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:iconcomplete-herpderp:
awesome! keep doing it! also, may i suggest that you do more multiple boobs art and stories? that's my fetish
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Although I liked the original a lot this one is also pretty good, will you continue it? Also can you please say what happened with the girl the next bus ride from second shade?
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:icongamejunkie7:
Aw yea! A brilliant start Ox! Very well done, it sets the atmosphere perfectly and shows that without a doubt Professor Rainbow isn't all bullshit unlike your original "chase after main character to desperately get their attention" method you did last time. I actually feel like I'm reading the novelization of an impressively structured manga, please tell me you have more plans for this than just sexy material.

I can see this evolving into more than just a very sexy tale but one of action, adventure and controversy. Wouldn't the ability to transform someone's very body even if by the will of another be an epitome of power for people? Imagine the horror such a thing could bring if such a potent ability got into the hands of a gang boss or the government.

Using it a gang boss could make his most trusted fellows enhanced warriors and because the boss would be the one to control their bodies that would mean he would have dominion over them regardless of how strong he makes them.

Using it a government could make the ultimate soldiers or spies by changing a person's physical appearance so that they can remain hidden and even never return to their exposed identity to keep them safe or even silence opposition suddenly.

You have created something with what you have quoted as "infinite possibility" so I beg you Ox: exploit this.

Also please upload the pictures you put in this story so that larger versions could be viewed if you don't already plan too, I'd love to see them bigger so I can see them better, especially the last one and the one where they pose.
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Oxdarock Jul 8, 2013   Digital Artist
Thanks so much for you feedback!

I've been told before that, compared to the first draft, that this version is much better, by leaps and bounds. Admittedly, I have said that the one before was something I wrote on impulse, however this one has gone through a lot more rewriting. I'm very glad that it plays out very similar to a manga, if anything, I've tried to make it into something of a light novel.

I can say that the story will develop into something more than sexy material, though I can't say it'll get as serious as what you've mentioned. Still, it will have it's dramatic moments, I can assure you that.

I will be uploading larger version of the pictures on a day-by-day basis. Just enough to leave space in between chapters.

Glad to hear that you enjoyed it so far! :)
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:icongamejunkie7:
Ah that's very assuring to hear, I look forward to seeing more.

And I suddenly thought of how a very hilarious situation could occur between two people Mr. Colors has altered could get into a contest with him having to not only mediate but enact their requests.

Seriously what is with me? That just popped into my head out of nowhere like a deer suddenly jumping onto the road and smashing through my windshield only to burst out the back window because I ducked and it suddenly bounds away again like nothing happened.

And where the hell did that one come from? I need to get back to writing, my imagination is getting more exuberant than a robot parakeet on nitroglycerin.
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