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Color Girl-Second Color by Oxdarock Color Girl-Second Color by Oxdarock

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Robots, Run-downs, and head rolling boobs. Wow, who could've seen that one coming? (Not me. Nope)

For those of you who've read the first version of Color Girl, you'll notice some familiar faces (or boobs). This time, while the scene is similar, we've gone somewhat further into the story than last time. What remains of the bus girl still remains a mystery (at least until I write the next chapter).

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lilyflower332 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013
is lucy based off of lucario?
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complete-herpderp Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013
what the fuck is up with shelia
o_o

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meismeduh Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
ok im now a fan, i loved it from start to finish. i like how much character the characters have xD.
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GameJunkie7 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
HAHAHAHA~ So he IS popular with the girls, he's just stuck in either friend zones or weird-zones with them XD

Jackie just HAS to happen, you've been alluding to it for a good bit and the whole dream of her being a Succubus is gold for the Rainbow Juice...ok that name just doesn't work for me I'll call it Color Cola, to bring to life for her.

Not to mention the large plethora of interesting and unique girls you've introduced as obvious potentials is very enticing. I'm particular to Sheila and her rubber bullet loaded gun, makes me think of a slightly more introverted female version of Sagara from Full Metal Panic.

In fact so far your story style is very heavily reminiscent of Full Metal Panic and the spinoff Fumoffu that I would just die laughing if there's a PONY~ pervert section involving said molester changing around the "Tails" styles of pony tails or if Bonta-kun makes a cameo XD it would fit right in with the more crazy segments of your story.
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Oxdarock Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013   Digital Artist
Thanks so much for the feedback!

Because I read so much manga, foreshadowing is just something that I LOVE to do. As for the large number of female cast members, the point of that is to keep you guessing as I reveal them. Future pictures might make it obvious who's who, but for now you'll just have to keep guessing.

As for my story style, I've never seen Full Metal Panic and have only seen one episode of Fumoffu a long time ago. I've also been that my writing style is similar to Negima before, which would probably be extremely close.
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GameJunkie7 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really? I've seen and read Negima but you didn't spark any bells on that front :iconoddplz: Code Lyoko seems closer than Negima in that regard but that's because my brain is a very confusing thing.

But yes try some Fumoffu and you'll see what I'm saying.

Also I can't not imagine something hilarious like Rainbow popping in unannounced and Quick's family all being conveniently out on some fancy outing with Rainbow trying to supply him with more equipment to test and such like maybe even the ability to control the transformations on oneself, I can see Rainbow wanting to add a feature like that beings it would bring more freedom and modularity to the experiment but also some risk so it would only be for Quick at first if he's daring enough to test it on himself, which considering Roger's pushy nature will likely be a long way off.

And Please say Rainbow, Rosie and FoxKitty will show up again in a hilarious fashion similar to their original introduction :D, they're too great to just appear and then be gone forever without trying to make Quick's life hell in some unusual manner.

Or don't, please leave me in suspense now that I think about it, a story is about not knowing what's going to happen next and you're doing a good job of it, keep it up.
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Dragonkingmark Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
wow, seems rogers is gonna be a hand full for colors huh?
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xWCSI Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2013
Can not wait for more of the bus girl. She is so perfect, shy, quiet, likes video games, and has very large....... assets.
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mathmeistro Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
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"She's beautiful, she's rich, she's got huge... tracts of land."
-King of Swamp Castle
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xWCSI Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2013
How do you know she is rich?
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